Post 10- Treatment and Feedback

"Run" Treatment

By Natasha Chandler

Gadebridge Park. Late evening. We open to see a large amount of zombies running frantically across the empty field, Drenched in blood with there organs protruding out of there decomposing bodies. Terrified, a group of 18 year old's run across the field screaming and fighting of the infected as they run. A girl Charlie becomes the focus of are attention as she uses brutally hits an infected zombie in the face with a bashed up baseball bat.
A guy falls to the ground, "Jacob" Charlie screeches as she sprints over to the boy laying on the ground as a group of the infected surround him. Charlie charges through the infected savagely beading them with the bat  that she grasps firmly.  She drops the bat as she grasps Jacobs hand and leads him away, They catch up with the rest of the group who are hiding in a near by car park.
As they can hear the infected closing in around them the group begging to realise that they will not be able to escape this without sacrificing one of there own. The first survivor states that the oldest should sacrifice themselves  and states that one of the older survivors should just be left here as bate. An argument breaks out between the group the noise from the argument begins to attract more and more of the infected. Through out the argument Charlie stays deadly quiet as Jacob begins to attempt to defuse the situation but it is too late.
The infected zombies begin to mass around the group of survivors, they soon are overwhelmed. Charlie shouts and begins to lead the zombies away. Puzzled Jacob asks her what are you doing, He soon clocks on to what she is doing as his face drops and she tells him to run.

Feedback

I first got feedback from a group of people with a variety of age ranges, when I presented them with my first idea there opinion was that it may be to complicated to do within five min's and that I may be better to simplify it and to also perhaps make it unique in a way and perhaps shoot it from first person.

After the feedback I presented the new treatment you can see above. I have made the idea more simple and I know hope to shoot it mainly from first person. I then showed this too my media class who were concerned about how I would make the zombies look real and how I would make the whole scenario appear more believable. I plan to use some friend of mine who do make up and horror make up to help me make them look gory. In addition to this I also will be using editing and camera techniques in order to make the whole thing look more real.